Exercise 1
Write the concluding paragraph for
the following essay. 80-100 words
Question: It has been said by
various social commentators over the ages, among them Dostoyevsky, that how
civilized a country is can be measured by how it treats its inmates or those in
prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?
Torture,
mistreatment, abuse, and squalid and dangerous conditions are considered to be
signs of barbarity by many people. I am one of these people. I believe that
when these negative social conditions and actions are manifested in a society,
they signal that something is amiss with that society. I will explain my
reasons for this.
Those who
are most prone to be mistreated, tortured, or held in terrible conditions are
prisoners.
I am not
arguing for some kind of limitless leniency. I am not saying that criminals
aren’t problematic and that they don’t deserve punishment. Crime and insecurity
are social ills; it is a terrible experience to be the victim of a
crime—especially a violent one. Nevertheless, I am arguing for a rational and
firm way to carry out the punishment of those who commit crimes and are caught.
Just as civilized societies do not believe that children should be tortured or
abused in the process of their raising, a civilized society does not mistreat
its prisoners. I think that the analogy of raising children and dealing with
criminals has a certain similarity in this aspect as bringing up children
requires moments of discipline and punishment because parents are also
socializing their children and teaching them about limitations and obligations.
Furthermore,
cruel and abusive punishment have been shown to be unnecessary to lower crime
rates. Countries, such as Saudi Arabia, Iran, or the United States, do not have
lower crime rates because they apply public beatings (Saudi Arabia and Iran) or
executions (all three countries). The United States does not have particularly
low rates of crime while its prisons are very unpleasant places to be. The US
prison system’s harsh realities have not been an effective deterent. It seems
that these prisons are a way for society to exact revenge on the transgressors
being held in them.
On the other
hand, some countries, such as those in Europe, are famous for not executing
anybody. Their prisons are rather safe places that perform the role of
incarceration without turning into violent and dangerous environments. They
could even be described as civilized places. Perhaps, as a result, they are low
crime societies.
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